This has alot of potential-i would edit another version and take out the capitalist winners, have these winners extend the context of the message--i.e. climate change, world hunger--food for africa-, etc. i think it would be even more powerful without the yacht jokes and show how everyday people would/could do something heroic like the medical care for everyone does--stay with that and continue that line of thinking--keep the bush, rummy, etc. of course and the message could be all that more powerful--i think the yacht guy etc. takes away from the message-
This has alot of potential-i would edit another version and take out the capitalist winners, have these winners extend the context of the message--i.e. climate change, world hunger--food for africa-, etc. i think it would be even more powerful without the yacht jokes and show how everyday people would/could do something heroic like the medical care for everyone does--stay with that and continue that line of thinking--keep the bush, rummy, etc. of course and the message could be all that more powerful--i think the yacht guy etc. takes away from the message-
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This has alot of potential-i would edit another version and take out the capitalist winners, have these winners extend the context of the message--i.e. climate change, world hunger--food for africa-, etc. i think it would be even more powerful without the yacht jokes and show how everyday people would/could do something heroic like the medical care for everyone does--stay with that and continue that line of thinking--keep the bush, rummy, etc. of course and the message could be all that more powerful--i think the yacht guy etc. takes away from the message-
Anonymous
This has alot of potential-i would edit another version and take out the capitalist winners, have these winners extend the context of the message--i.e. climate change, world hunger--food for africa-, etc. i think it would be even more powerful without the yacht jokes and show how everyday people would/could do something heroic like the medical care for everyone does--stay with that and continue that line of thinking--keep the bush, rummy, etc. of course and the message could be all that more powerful--i think the yacht guy etc. takes away from the message-
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